make your own poem, day one

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make your own poem, day one

24 July 2012 by neil reid

make your own poem, day one

describe your morning just before noon

describe what you didn’t do

describe how water feels in your mouth

describe speaking a lie

describe honey at first dawn

describe a pause unvocalized

describe the moon when you’re listening

describe the breath of a sail becalmed

describe the missing button from your shirt

describe in fewer words your pathway home

describe how this all relates

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Posted in Draft, Poems | Tagged describe, make a poem, mirror | 6 Comments

6 Responses

on 24 July 2012 at 6:56 am | Reply Yousei Hime

I really love this. I inspires thought…deep thought. I do believe the “describe the moon when you’re listening” is my favorite line. I actually paused in my reading to contemplate it. Wonderful poem.
- on 24 July 2012 at 9:21 am | Reply neil reid
  
  Thank you much. Haven’t written much “off the cuff” for some while.
  
  I like that this is a poem inside a poem. It is as it is, yet also, it could be taken literal as instruction for another poem. Gives it kind of a double life. Then again, that in fact is how this one began, in response to another poem I read (although not directly related here). Thanks again.
  - on 24 July 2012 at 9:25 am | Reply Yousei Hime
    
    You’re absolutely right about its complex nature. I thought it a prompt at first. I enjoyed it. It’s wonderful when we write something that continues to please us on many levels. You’re welcome and congrats again.
    - on 2 August 2012 at 2:49 am neil reid
      
      Thank you twice!
on 1 August 2012 at 6:10 pm | Reply purplepeninportland

This is just splendid, Neil! I also thought, at first, that it was a prompt.
- on 2 August 2012 at 2:48 am | Reply neil reid
  
  Thank you much. And your first thought is also right. I thought that even for myself, both before and after writing it. Then again I suppose one test is – will someone “answer” this poem with their own?
  
  And wouldn’t that be interesting if the second also posed questions for a third?? A poem talking with another poem? Not that I’m suggesting anything you might do! Or am I? 🙂 (meant to be a disarming gesture… )
  
  At the least might this not make an interesting “prompt” idea for the community at WWP as well. It would have to be a two or three week process I suppose (if not too much of an octopus!).
  
  One of my favorite online writers used to inspire poem responses from me, and I loved the process, although it was not like here. Sadly she’s not writing at this time.
  
  Thanks for encouraging me! 🙂
  
  neil